<Lee Hyung Jip>
South Korea KMLA
08/08/13
By writing this persuasive writing, I hope to convince my mom to agree with me. What I'm trying to say that I want to play online games 2 hours in weekends. 1 hour Saturday and Sunday. I won't get addicted to the game. Now, my mother always thinks I will get addicted so she only allows me to play 30 minutes a day in weekends. First of all, I will prove that I won't get addicted. According to the internet articles, if we look how many hours do addicted people play game the average is between 4~5 hours. However, I just want to play only 2 hours a week, and at the weekends. Anyone would think that 2 hours a week is far from addicted which is 4~5 hours a day. Also, according to the self testing method of Mr.Lee Hyung Cho I was way below addiction (I've done it myself)
Based on this first point, I suppose I've proven I won't get addicted if I play only 2 hours a week.
Second of all, I think I need something to help me to get rid of my stress. Maybe you are curious what stress I have compared to yours. Well, I'm worried about my scores, my future(job) and which school I'm going in. Reading books as you say helps me, but I think it doesn't. It's working for me not taking a rest. In addition, 2 hours a week, I think it makes no difference and doesn't affect my lecture skills. It has been proven by my report card, in which my lecture exam scores didn't fall even after I started to play 2 hours of games in 1 week.
My last point is also about addiction. Because what you're mostly concerned about is addiction. And I'm going to prove that I'm not addicted a second time. According to the researches based on DSM-4(for the source click here) which is a self-testing method. The last section is 'can't find difference between reality and game. But you know I can. If I couldn't I won't be here at GLPS camp, writing an essay to you. The second section says 'feels nervous,terrible without playing games'. As you see at home, I don't feel nervous at all, I can perfectly do may thing else even while I'm not playing games.
For these reasons, I believe I will be safe from addicted even though I play games 2 hours a day in weekend. So I hope that, when I go back home, you allow me all I've asked you.
-Hyung Jip Lee
Hi, brothershouse. Good to see you writing blog stories. Good writing ! I feel your passion for online games. But you need rereading your persuasive writing, and think twice about what you have in mind when you're writing. Logical is not sufficient to persuade someone. When you try more to understand other's position, your writings will become more persuasive. Good luck...
ReplyDeleteProving you are not addicted is insufficient to persuade your mother; the fact is that your mother simply thinks that not playing games at all is the best solution as it will avert any possibility of addiction to begin with.
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